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Unimaginatively named, but the premise isn't hugely original anyway; two girls get on the wrong side of a teacher at their boarding school, followed by shameless amounts of smut and the pair generally having a bad time. Hopefully the execution is worthwhile.

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https://twitter.com/13otsu/status/1266810235986927616

Feedback is much appreciated, I'm not sure if I went over the top or became repetitive, or if it just seemed that way to me because I got stuck re-reading every paragraph what felt like half a dozen times each while writing.

... Enjoy!

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Nextgen00

Posted by Nextgen00 3 years ago Report

This is great! I don't think it got repetitive at all, and i loved how she slowly compressed them more and more. I'd love to see her vacation, shrinking them even more, 'cause this is probably my new favorite on this site.

threk

Posted by threk 3 years ago Report

Slow compression is a fun idea but I was worried I was basically saying the same thing over and over, so I'm glad you liked it!

Nextgen00

Posted by Nextgen00 3 years ago Report

I feel like the prey perspective really helped there. If it was just the outside view yeah it might have gotten a bit repetitive, but since you also had the girls slowly being constricted, losing what little motion they had, and the stages, it stays fun.

LemonBarb

Posted by LemonBarb 3 years ago Report

If there were a hypothetical sequel. I can't help but wonder how far/deeply compressed those permanently entrapped victims would have been, until say; they wouldn't even show on the Teacher's own body?

Apostolos

Posted by Apostolos 3 years ago Report

Well that was interesting

threk

Posted by threk 3 years ago Report

Good interesting? Bad interesting?
Just unexpected weird interesting?

Apostolos

Posted by Apostolos 3 years ago Report

Good interesting, concept of a gradual shift in size seems good, maybe she could abduct another unlucky pair before she goes if she gets good enough at it

threk

Posted by threk 3 years ago Report

Happy to hear that, I may do a sequel at some point so I guess we'll just have to see :P

Apostolos

Posted by Apostolos 3 years ago Report

Question has she had sex with someone inside her before?

threk

Posted by threk 3 years ago Report

No, with her ex, her partner was obviously inside her at the time, and with these two it was just masturbation.

Apostolos

Posted by Apostolos 3 years ago Report

Hmm in the sequel maybe that student meets up with her later by accident and they start dating, she finds it cute but not serious until she finds something has changed within her womb after sex

LemonBarb

Posted by LemonBarb 3 years ago Report

Honestly, if it's in context to that student that developed fetishes. I'd not be surprised if jumping the gun in possible begging, he ends up in the womb instead before she 'leaves' for Maternity leave... And stuck with a half shrunk/compressed victims, being a looming fate he'd soon suffer within a slowly constricting womb of Varis. Or alternately, ends up 'disappearing', just so he can be a sort of 'servant' for her, that's a "bit" better than a dildo... But with the likely implication of if he's not "sturdy" or entertaining enough, he'd end up trapped as well.

That said. I'd probably bet if sex with occupants are involved, it won't have her be 'pregnant', just have her own hormones/sex squish/crush her occupants by another 'notch'. Possibly at a push, 'icing' on cake if the victims end up squirming in horror, over semen sticking to them, or dissolving/melting within the lubricant of her womb.

MetalSlime

Posted by MetalSlime 3 years ago Report

I’d love to see more like this.

Nightcrawler99

Posted by Nightcrawler99 3 years ago Report

I want a sequel to this SO BAD!!!
I even have ideas for it!
This is the kind of UB story I love reading!
Unwilling Entrapment UB absolutely RULES!

Apostolos

Posted by Apostolos 3 years ago Report

I agree this one deserves a sequel... in a twisted way the girls only brought this on themselves when they tried to irritate the sleeping bear that is Freya in class time

threk

Posted by threk 3 years ago Report

Unwilling endo UB is the absolute best, glad to hear you're a fan!

I'll admit though, once they're trapped so completely I'm not sure where to take the story from there; the prey aren't exactly able to interact with much anymore. Getting the prey's perspective is important I think, but if their situation is about as bad as it can get then their experience is probably going to be a bit monotonous.

So, I'm curious what ideas you had. Maybe one of them might be something I can run with :P

LemonBarb

Posted by LemonBarb 3 years ago Report

My hunch is short term, likely in the lens of "stages of grief", over dealing with solitary confinement, influenced by a predator's hormones, sex drive, and likely worse over a 'holiday' period. That said, I feel that if they're compressed enough, they might even 'fit' in ovaries, if going over a possibility/sadism on the predator "separating" the two lovers/victims, and taking one last bliss before they just end up losing their 'luster'....

Or, mid-shrinking (to possible 'unseen/felt' body horror in an erotic way.) More victim/s are pulled in, and the prisoner's have maybe 'some' hope of getting out. Before the teacher keeps her new victims in 'permanently', despair kicks in again, and the predator ends up 'full' again, with wriggling life within her womb.

If anything, in another lens given the transformation. I'd probably say it'd be a matter of time before the predator ends up becoming some sort of mini-giantess, or even further... And then she'd need more victims to be just as buzzed/sated. Which leads to more victims, and a hypothetical escalating rampage, possibly.

Or, assuming she doesn't end up becoming some sort of "Prison", for criminals with a life-sentence, or something. Or alternately, get's of thoughts on them being so "non-wriggling", entertaining thoughts that she might have absorbed them 'utterly'... Before they're just so tightly compacted, they can't even move an inch, within her body... (By that point, a possible horror story of being super compressed, within an egg/ovary? But not age regressed, just trapped in an eternal state, with an irreversible chance of not being born at all.)

Nightcrawler99

Posted by Nightcrawler99 3 years ago Report

Sorry it took so long to respond. Been kinda busy.
The idea i had is rather straight forward. Freya is going to ask for maternity leave so I was thinking what if because she carrie them so long or starts taking a new medication she actually becomes pregnant with them?

They become connected to her but don’t regress or anything. Instead Freya gets the raw end here because her belly refuses to shrink further and instead expands out with amniotic fluids to give Hailey and Gemma space. Freya has to endure morning sickness and her occupants can now struggle more freely. She still feels pleasure from their movements but strong kicks can hurt a but.

I’d love to see her vacation become hectic as she has to endure their antics. Would also love to see her unwillingly go into labor with them at some point on her vacation and then have to force them back in just to go home.

Apostolos

Posted by Apostolos 3 years ago Report

I have an idea, maybe while on vacation she finds a couple of girls trying to go through her hotel room for something of value, leading to containing the two new prisoners with her students. As a byproduct of how tight she’s compressed her body, the new occupants get force inside the original occupants, one to either girl. This would give the two a different perspective and interaction with Freya as they begin to feel the same way she does, maybe a sort of moral corruption where they want to have more in side them too. Eventually they may be let out in order to gather more toys for their “mother” and themselves to play with.

runeguden

Posted by runeguden 3 years ago Report

LOVE IT!

Straxacore

Posted by Straxacore 3 years ago Report

Great stuff

threk

Posted by threk 3 years ago Report

Glad you liked it
feelsgoodman

Straxacore

Posted by Straxacore 3 years ago Report

Also I was planning on writing a permanent UB sitch. It will be coming soon

threk

Posted by threk 3 years ago Report

Ooh, noice. Looking forward to it.

LemonBarb

Posted by LemonBarb 3 years ago Report

Hope you don't mind writing in on your reply. But your unbirth stories are interesting. And if anything, I only wish you wrote a few more Unbirth stories in the future, Straxxacore.

Whereaminow27

Posted by Whereaminow27 3 years ago Report

o_O.... You need to do continuation of this with her feeding on girls at the new school. Pretty good story. I like how she let everything think she did digest them.

acejt

Posted by acejt 3 years ago Report

love this story. non fatal, unwilling Permanent entrapment UB is such an interesting topic <3

threk

Posted by threk 3 years ago Report

It's such a great concept, it's just hard to find a long-term same-size situation that's even slightly practical.
Feels like half of Varis' character development is working out why she's twisted in the head enough to want to be perma-preggers :P

acejt

Posted by acejt 3 years ago Report

u did a great job tho!! i'v seen other idea's around pred who are just so tall and numb that wasted when it happens they just.... forget.

JeebyHeebies

Posted by JeebyHeebies 3 years ago Report

Story's pretty cool but damn, it got REALLY morbid at the end there.

threk

Posted by threk 3 years ago Report

I actually had the ending laid out before half the stuff in the middle lol.

It's a bit dark, juuuust a little bit.

Endo is basically solitary confinement when you get down to it, sexy or not the unlucky victim isn't getting a happy ending if they lose their last chance to escape.

Barkivious

Posted by Barkivious 3 years ago Report

Amazing story, should write a part 2 detailing the impregnation of freyas new daughters and the inevitable birth.

threk

Posted by threk 3 years ago Report

Thanks!
Impregnation though? Who's impregnating whom?

Barkivious

Posted by Barkivious 3 years ago Report

Oh, I meant shed be flaunting the girls off as her own daughters to the point where shed actually begin to regress them. Or the story could turn into her becoming infatuadted by the changes she had and bgins taking more and more people. The scond one would obviously involve getting rid of the original girls so she more room, somehow.

Barkivious

Posted by Barkivious 3 years ago Report

Sorry for bad grammar, phones from another country.

LemonBarb

Posted by LemonBarb 3 years ago Report

Honestly, given the tone. I don't think the victims would be regressed at all. More shrunk, if anything, and at worst; trapped within ovaries. With no chance of escape, even 'if' the predator/teacher got pregnant with other eggs... They'd likely still be trapped within the ovaries instead, long after the predator "might" have gone into menopause.

Svalbard

Posted by Svalbard 3 years ago Report

Such an exquisite teacher unbirth story, with some very much appreciate growth and beautification at the end.

threk

Posted by threk 3 years ago Report

Kidnapping, abuse of power, reaping the benefits of other's suffering, it's amazing what sounds sexy in the right fantasy :P

LemonBarb

Posted by LemonBarb 3 years ago Report

Honestly, icing on the cake would be the teacher could still do the same thing, within the boarding school without even having to take "Maternity leave", and can callously met that same punishment on future victims, on a whim. But alas, it'd likely spiral to a horror story on the students, over "don't end up in her belly/womb forever" stories... And a possible fan doing everything he could/can to make the teacher even "bigger", even if it's at the expense of other students.

Vstar66

Posted by Vstar66 3 years ago Report

You have to make this a series

threk

Posted by threk 3 years ago Report

I don't write a lot, or very fast for that matter :(, but tempting, tempting. Not sure where I'd take these three if I did, but there's a whole school available to play in, so maybe some day.

LemonBarb

Posted by LemonBarb 3 years ago Report

I'd likely bet if making a series; you could make it a case of part power abuse, on the staff/education end, with the predator being a 'star' teacher, and given an alibi/excuse to setting wise, "not" worry on having to hide in a new location/country... While students grow from curiousity, to looming fear. Possibility of an 'annoying' or threatening teacher, being another victim. And possibly even end with the schools principal being so obsessed/lust driven over her beauty, she'd want to be 'in' Varis... And then later regrets it.

But by that lens, it could be a possible thought on "if Varis could stay with no 'consequences', how long until she get's promoted to Principal? And how would she end up 'farming' the outcasts and delinquents, with absolutely no worry on law breaking. Since their 'rights' were already written away with the fine print?"

Darian

Posted by Darian 3 years ago Report

Half the fun is the entrapment here. But I like the longevity of the work so far... gives a sense of time and imprisonment.

While my fetish wishes that they got a happier ending, ie, a pred that did care about them as a bit more than a superdom, but eh. It's still sexy as heck and they aren't dead.

threk

Posted by threk 3 years ago Report

What's the point of having a character be stuck for the long-haul if you don't get to see some of it, I say.

I always end up slightly torn with this sort of ending as well tbh. A domination this complete is sexy, but it's a fate worse than death for characters that don't deserve it. Hnng, moral choices.

Good thing it's fantasy, but, if you want a potential loophole then perhaps Varis made an error when she sent the texts from their mobiles after she'd left for her holiday. Maybe detectives searching for the missing students traced the texts to the country of origin and realised she was the one who sent them. Maybe they apprehended her on her return and worked out they were still inside of her. Maybe they even managed to force her to release them, and Gemma and Hailey took some time off for therapy, changed to a new school, passed all of their exams the next year and kept their new life-long bond as they lived as happily-ever-after as they could.
Maybe :P

aldan92t

Posted by aldan92t 3 years ago Report

option is possible one girl managet to escape while Varis was sleeping,it seems to me a scene with escape or try,looks exciting. Or Varis gives one girl to his girlfriend

Darian

Posted by Darian 3 years ago Report

Argh, why is morality so hard to make domination sexy?!
The struggles of non-fluffy vore.

LemonBarb

Posted by LemonBarb 3 years ago Report

Honestly, my hunch is if things got into a "whodunnit" mystery to the point the student's are (surgically) removed from Varis. Given the amount of time stuck inside her, I feel they'd likely have long term biological consequences. Like say, from being "shrunk" into being more miniature in size, to possible 'body horror' that needed surgery/etc, that still left them 'small' in comparison to what they were before...

That said. If going on a long term 'collection' analog, one might argue that solitary confinement horror aside; as Varis ends up pulling more permanent residents 'inside' her compressing womb, they might be able to have a bit less of a hell, compared to what it could have been if there was only one occupant. If anything, one might argue they'd eventually be so numbed/broken by hormones, that sex might end up being the only relief they have... And then they become the next element of horror/torture to future occupants.

LemonBarb

Posted by LemonBarb 3 years ago Report

Made an account, just to reply to this. And my thoughts are, if they're slowly getting more and more compressed, I'd wonder on a lens how long until their bodies end up 'looking' more shaped like the 'bodies' from The Enigma of Amigara Fault.. Or, they're eventually squished/compressed enough, to possibly be pulled/trapped in the ovaries for likely, an eternity?

That said, my hunch at the amount of apathy the teacher's (and possible principal) have over her 'punishment', is that there's a decent chance that for all I know, they might not 'let' her have maternity leave... But totally cover up any 'missing persons' case, in the viewpoint of lawsuits and punishment. Those who put two/two end up more in discipline (even if say, the law enforcement can't do a dime without any 'actual' evidence being shown.) And it could very well spiral to the possibility of Varis, being more full with even more permanent victims (possibly crushing on the previous victims, and squirming/struggling in horror over the implications of it being permament sinking in.)

And that's honestly before I'd like to read a sequel where the victims end up through stages of grief over likely eternal imprisonment, before hormones and sex drive end up breaking what will they have, until they're nothing more than a mere 'extension' of the sadistic teacher's sex drive... Or, the possible photo meme's leading to stalkers and possible fan services spiraling around her... Which could in a certain lens, be an excuse for her to have a second round of punishments, from photographers with their phones...

threk

Posted by threk 3 years ago Report

Oof, Amigara Fault is not something I'd connect with sexy stuff :S Personally I was thinking more along partial hammerspacey type shenanigans, but that sort of body compression would be great for more horrory-type stuff!

I'm thinking about a sequel at some point in the uncertain future, so you'll have to wait and see how it goes :P

LemonBarb

Posted by LemonBarb 3 years ago Report

In that case, I'd just wait and see on a scale of possibly 'squished', or possibly turned into "jelly" instead (if not shrunk so far, they're more 'miniatures', or possibly dependent on her womb to survive after too long, like a sort of analog to Stockholm Syndrome...)

Either way, tone wise. I'd at a minimum (reveal or not), hope that this predator, has them for keeps, and a future sequel likely being the girls coping in their eternal life inside their sadistic tutor, as their home is constantly shrinking... And then dealing with a sudden new arrival/s, on top. And with their current condition being a horror for both them, and the new arrivals on what is likely to be 'expected' in eternal confinement within a predator's own uterus.

And that's before the thought even comes on the predator becoming more of a mini-giantess, or unnaturally strong from constant prisoners, and becoming more confident as a predator. That may rub on her, if she develops/finds a new boyfriend, or girlfriend (if not "Slave" or "toy" to indulge on her sadisms, under pain of vore or entrapment...)

... Or that possible student who developed a crush on the predator, doing anything to be 'near' her... Even if it means throwing himself into her womb next, and risking indecency/punishment just to stay 'close' to his fetish fueled crush... Or worse, stalks/finds her new house/place, and rigs the scenario so she's constantly 'full'... By abusing/exploiting technology, totally.

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But eh, speculation and following this story (and you) aside. Still feel that unique take on unbirth aside. My hunch is long term, she's probably going to compress those prisoners until they don't show an 'inch' on her womb/belly. And even then, it'd likely go through to a point where they're 'probably' ultimately absorbed (or if not, still sentient/trapped deeper... With absolutely no hope of even 'escaping', even if the predator 'considered' letting them out, because they're even deeper...)

Whatisaname

Posted by Whatisaname 3 years ago Report

Sorry it took so long to comment. This is outstanding. If I wasn't so caught up with the style I'm doing now, I would love to write something like this.

Unwilling, permanent entrapment is some of the best sauce in the kitchen.

threk

Posted by threk 3 years ago Report

Glad you liked it! I'd love to see something like this from you too, your non-fatal stuff is always great :D
And Haha, that's an amazing metaphor

Whatisaname

Posted by Whatisaname 3 years ago Report

I just might have to...

LemonBarb

Posted by LemonBarb 3 years ago Report

Honestly, for the horror of this to really sink in. There needs to be a sequel, where the victims are slowly, shrinking even 'further' (to the point of not even "showing" their size to the predators belly.) Long driven into despair, and to the point where the only mercy they have, is each other...

But it'd probably be to the point of "how do you narrate things, gotten to the point where there's only sensations?" And trying to remain 'somewhat' sane, or sentient within a permanent, biological prison?

And depending on if there's another 'set' of victims, or if they get pushed deeper? The potential 'fear' and horror of being separated within an uncaring pred's body, with no chance of reuniting with their just as damned companion.

But alas, my mental image on if there's a 'long' term sequel. Is for all I know, those victims could have been compressed so tightly, they end up trapped within the predators ovaries, or potentially 'trapped' within a new set of victims, when her "womb" is no longer 'empty'.

merelyatoy

Posted by merelyatoy 3 years ago Report

Really great work, with some themes you don't see too often. Love the gradual mental changes to the captives, and the way they're at the mercy of their host's desires and biology. The idea of the young man at the end 'imprinting' on her body is intriguing, as though he becomes subconsciously attracted to the idea of being unbirthed himself...

Hope you write more along this lines in future!

threk

Posted by threk 3 years ago Report

Thank you! Instant mindbreak never really seemed to give the chance to savour what was happening or reflect on the inevitability of it, but once the prey's been consumed the pred is free to take things slow~ Considering the prevalence of unwilling prey I'm surprised forced arousal/orgasm isn't more of a thing in vore (I love your work btw). Such a shame :'( Still, be the change you want to see in the world and all that :P

TheNinja0

Posted by TheNinja0 3 years ago Report

This story is most excellent. I normally don't have the patience for reading stories, usually end up skimming, but I read this all the way through.
I agree that it is annoying when comics or stories have a permanent state reached, and then just end. That is the best bit and I want to see more.
I would love to see a sequel to this.
Some ideas that I have, that are based on things that happen in this story are as follows:
In this story, the captive character dislike the love juices that the teacher secretes. An idea is, maybe over time they start to become acclimated to the womb, and possibly addicted to the love juices. Even if they are let out, they want to get back in.
Perhaps over time they stop being so unwilling, Stockholm syndrome?
I really like the hammerspace idea, and the way the teacher grows and adapts to her passengers.

threk

Posted by threk 3 years ago Report

I can see how it may be hard to write from prey's perspective when the whole permanent entrapment thing fundamentally means not much will be changing for them, but it's still a shame to see the story end just after they're inside, that's one of the most fun parts!
Glad you enjoyed it, and thanks for the watch :)

Restrogenic

Posted by Restrogenic 3 years ago Report

I absolutely loved this story. Well written UB that still obeys the vast majority of physics is sorely missing in many stories. It just gives it much more oomph when the ‘how’ has genuine reasoning behind it. The only qualm I would have at all would be the speed at which Freya was able to restrict and constrict her captives. I also don’t see her plan working long term. Such a punishment will inevitably get out, and following the girls’ mysterious disappearance and Freya’s subsequent job change after displaying clear behavioral and emotional difference at having enacted such an intimate ‘punishment’, an investigation is inevitable. Not only that, but its simply not feasible in the long run if she has any medical issues which are bound to arise considering nothing of what she did is (usually) normal for human biology.

Honestly, I think a better ending that opens more doors to further this story would be to instead have the Hailey and Gemma join the teacher in pursuit of intimate affairs. The students have no way to vent their sexual frustration in such an enclosed environment and Freya, quite clearly, has a distinct need to be more wholesome (In a ironically less than wholesome way depending on how she goes about it, as seen). But, just Hailey and Gemma wouldn’t be enough as it seems, according to the end of the story hinting at them being seniors, their time at the school is running short. Perhaps, while they are enjoying themselves within Freya one late evening after class, the new boy mentioned in the story who took to Freya so adamantly, will stumble across the three in the act after having forgotten X Y or Z in class. This would allow Freya to maintain her, albeit less so, sense of literal fulfillment using the boy as the next in line post graduation of Gemma and Hailey while also netting her a fuck buddy to keep around for more practical bedroom endeavors. This would then allow for either two separate story lines or just one focused on Freya or just focused on Hailey and Gemma or swaps focus between them all. I think that it would be cool to also see Hailey learn Freya’s technique to use on Gemma for both erotic enterprise in their relationship but also as a tool to deepen it by helping Gemma overcome her claustrophobia using her girlfriend’s womb as a safe starting point.

Wow. I did not expect to write so much. But that just goes to show great this story is and all the potential it’s characters have! Thanks for sharing this with all of us!

doomed

Posted by doomed 3 years ago Report

hmm , why didnt they start trying to bite their way out ?

threk

Posted by threk 3 years ago Report

Because in Vore media the only people who remember that they have teeth are the preds.

doomed

Posted by doomed 3 years ago Report

this is both illogical and logical . that was the perfect answer

LemonBarb

Posted by LemonBarb 3 years ago Report

And thinking back, given predatory nature. Even if they could 'try', it'd likely just 'bounce', or rub off. And at worst, minor discomfort that would be punished in due time, by the predator's very own biology.

LillyBells

Posted by LillyBells 3 years ago Report

Wonderful story, permanent entrapment is too rare. Good job :)

threk

Posted by threk 3 years ago Report

Happy to hear you liked it, and thanks for the watch! :)

mamamandy

Posted by mamamandy 2 years ago Report

best story on this site, by far

threk

Posted by threk 2 years ago Report

Wow, very flattered you think so :)

Zerg

Posted by Zerg 2 years ago Report

Would love to see another story similar to this or a part 2

LemonBarb

Posted by LemonBarb 2 years ago Report

Fun thing with that. Is I loved this story enough to have given some thought on a "hypothetical" sequel. Though at the moment, it hit a bit of a snag.

Soon, I might polish it enough, with mind in trying to be as "in character" as possible to Freya. But if it goes well, it'd be with the intent of there being more permament victims, at least.

cunquat

Posted by cunquat 2 years ago Report

This is amazing! Do you possibly see yourself making a sequel to this?

threk

Posted by threk 2 years ago Report

Glad you liked it, and thanks for the watch :)
I'm a bit of a slow writer, but there is one in the works!

cunquat

Posted by cunquat 2 years ago Report

I’d love to possibly give suggestions, would you mind me DMing them?

Blaine2297

Posted by Blaine2297 2 years ago Report

My friend, you have instilled in me a mix of fearful, unadulterated horror at the fate of these two girls, and also unyielding, unsatiable horniness at how hot this was to read.

That said, still absolutely terrifying. . .I know the tags say permanent, but is it wrong that I want to imagine she, eventually, lets them go?

Paraffine

Posted by Paraffine 2 years ago Report

That is quite the interesting premise you have here. Pred is rather cruel (for my taste only, though), but sometimes you need to tell the mean stories, too. The way she goes on with her daily life, her "foul deeds" visible to everybody and she's not even ashamed of it, that is rather rare.
The descriptions were also quite good, rather varied and visual.

CodeBlue

Posted by CodeBlue 2 years ago Report

Well this story is nothing short of fantastic!
I wonder what happened to Varis boyfriend though ;)

WeegeeCool

Posted by WeegeeCool 4 months ago Report

That was a good read...or skim
I basically just skipped to all the smexy bits.