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Hey everyone,
OMG this my first story or even first attempt on writing something lewd. please be gentle with me :) I had a blast writing this it feels completely different than drawing and makes for interesting way doing lewds.
This a story about Korra. It's not important if don't know anything about the universe as the it's a simple and straight forward scene of pred eating and digesting a prey. I love Korra's character as she makes for powerful and great pred. If this go's well I might even make a comic of this scene or something else involving Korra as in my opinion she is great. I try to mixed a good amount of elements of vore I like in this.
I've gotten help from a good friend FluffyLizardFunTime she did a amazing job at showing me the ropes and correcting on the things that I did wrong :) I strongly recommend to check out her gallery for better amazing stories and tales.
I hope you peeps enjoy let me know what you peeps think if you want to see more of me trying some new stuff out. And and if you want to see more of Korra (as in drawing or other content)
Take care!
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Posted by Shambles 1 month ago Report
Nice Job, Time, this is a really good story
Posted by TimeToRun 1 month ago Report
Thank you, im glad you like it.
Posted by Sehnsucht 1 month ago Report
Hiya Time! Really good to see you writing! I enjoyed this story from the start. You set the scene nicely, and Korra's flippant and brusque attitude comes across well. There was a good degree of detail and frankly the digestion was horrifying and very hot. I remember my first vore stories were similar in style: sometimes you just wanna see someone get ate :D Don't think I had the imagination you have about taking apart a human being, though.
Thought the use of second-person ("you") gave a degree of immediacy to the prey. Nice choice. The text kept flickering between present tense and past tense, which is one thing that could be addressed in future. But it didn't get in the way of this story too much.
I'll be excited to read what you write next. You're particularly adept at highlighting the horror of the prey's experience, and that's something I love ^^
Posted by TimeToRun 1 month ago Report
Hey Sehn, Thank you for the kind words. Yeah some of the digestion stuff comes natural to me but writing more casual stuff I can't get my head around.
Yeah I try to fix as much as I could of the present and past, but i wasn't able to fully remove it it's something i need to watch for as im chaotic person and write also chaotic. My next work will be more story and less reader pov.
Posted by Phantomfrost4 1 month ago Report
Man it has been so long since I’ve seen this series! I loved Korra as a kid, the story was really good!
Posted by TimeToRun 1 month ago Report
Thank you :) Yeah korra makes for a good pred imo
Posted by Tastykitty169 1 month ago Report
Happy to see you writing Time <3
Posted by TimeToRun 1 month ago Report
Was fun to do, i hope can do more