Eka's Portal Writing Group - Sept 2009 - All Submissions In!

[KavenBach]

ABOUT YOU:
Your name: KavenBach
Your writing library URL(s): http://aryion.com/g3/showgallery.php?id=70290
Have you read the rules and guidelines, and do you agree to them? YESSS.
Have you proofread your own story? Yes. A couple times and edits have already been made. But this IS a work in progress.

YOUR POST:
Title/Summary: The first story of a cannibal/dolcett series set in my perverse little world, except with frog-men as the meat-eaters instead of humans. A large group of female diplomats arrive in a hot, humid country ruled by frogmen called grenoils. Their purpose is to experience grenoil customs. However grenoils raise and butcher women, "piglets," for food! The diplomats are supposed to be safe, as are tourists, but... already the seeds of "mistakes" are being sown in this first chapter.

Word Count: Last I checked, it was 7,738 words, but with small add-ins might as well say it's 8,000 words.
Rating and Classification: soft grenoil/woman vore, fleeting public human sex, grenoil/woman sex, butchering/meat preparing scene, beheading, pheremonal lust, heavy sweating.

Type of Critique Preferred: Say whatever you feel is appropriate. Bear in mind this is my first attempt at a butchering-type storyline and even this chapter is very much a work in progress. Some details may be added (for example, I've noted that not once yet have I described a female grenoil).
Questions for the Readers: while I was hoping to geat as much of the description of the setting done in this chapter, was there too much of it to keep your attention? Or maybe you would prefer even more? Should I explain anything mentioned in here more fully (Amazoria, or grenoil lifestyle, or whatever)?
YOUR READING LIST:
Rating and Classification Preferred: No descriptive scat, no underage, no M/M, as much as possible no furries.
Critiquing Style: I tend to jot down things that strike me as I read the story. If something doesn't make sense to me I'll say so. If something strikes me as particularly keen or creative I will say so as well. I try to balance my critiques. Terrible spelling and grammar hurt my brain badly and ruin the reading experience for me.
Don't forget to attach your writing! Here she is. Attached and ready for your pleasure.

http://aryion.com/g3/showitem.php?id=176185

[Jacquelope]

ABOUT YOU:
Your name: Le Jacquelope, aka Le Jacq
Your writing library URL(s): http://aryion.com/g3/showgallery.php?id=155866
Have you read the rules and guidelines, and do you agree to them? Yes
Have you proofread your own story? Yes, this is actually a major revision.

YOUR POST:
Title/Summary: The Many Journeys of Ian Scranton, Chapter 2
Ian Scranton meets Hollani, an Arari fairy who has sworn off eating flesh. Well, technically...
(Note: Chapter 1 and 2 have both been heavily altered since the last EPWG entry was posted. It may be worth looking back at Chapter 1 to see why things have changed here.)

Word Count: 5771
At 2000 words, Ian has already been unbirthed.

Rating and Classification: There is unbirth, extra soft vore, and even a fight between fairies. Essentially: FF/M, fairies and plant women as preds with one human male as prey.

Type of Critique Preferred: Sock it to me!

Questions for the Readers: What do you think of the chapter title? I'm working on better titles. Are Ian's reactions a bit more... plausible?

YOUR READING LIST:
Rating and Classification Preferred: I prefer human/elf/fairy female preds but will tolerate furries. I absolutely avoid stories with underaged participants. I prefer to avoid scat and yaoi but if I have to choose between that and underaged stuff I'll read the latter.

Critiquing Style: I'm a big picture guy. I tend not to bother with spelling errors unless they're way too numerous or really distracting. Except for my stories - if you see them then please tell me!

The story can be found at: http://aryion.com/g3/showitem.php?id=172178

[4ofSwords]

Howdy, all! There's less than a week left to post your submission for September, the seventhest of all months! (Well, except maybe July.)

If you're a regular, whatcha waiting for?

If you're just considering joining for the first time - <grin> Whatcha waiting for? PM me or reply in thread if you have any questions or have a concern or two for the group. I suppose it's not right for everyone, but it is right for lotsa ones.

[Tiaji]

ABOUT YOU:
Your name: Tiaji
Your writing library URL(s): http://aryion.com/g3/showgallery.php?id=171281
Have you read the rules and guidelines, and do you agree to them? Yes, I have.
Have you proofread your own story? Yes.

YOUR POST:
Title/Summary: Collecting Her Catch - A pizza delivery guy making his last delivery of the night runs into someone from his past, and the best night of his life suddenly turns into the worst.
Word Count: 4653
Rating and Classification: Contains nudity, sex, oral sex, F/M and soft oral vore.
Type of Critique Preferred: I ask that you be courteous and respectful, but also honest. I prefer long critiques that are as in depth as possible. I like to know what the reader liked and disliked. I would like to know what you thought of my description, dialogue, and characters in particular.
Questions for the Readers: Did you think there was enough character development for Paul?

YOUR READING LIST:
Rating and Classification Preferred: I have a strong dislike for hard vore, graphic digestion, and scat. I prefer stories that involve human or humanoid predators. Other than that, I'm pretty open. I like many kinds of vore, I can handle any gender combination, and I'm fine with sexual content.
Critiquing Style: I don't critique things very often, so I'm not sure I really have a style. I will to be as honest and helpful as I can, while still being courteous and respectful, just like I ask my critics to be.

Don't forget to attach your writing! http://aryion.com/g3/showitem.php?id=176230

[4ofSwords]

Word Count: I hate to ask, but could someone do this for me?

4653, including the title. The return of Ms. Laudo! Hooray!

[bela]

[quote]One more question, by the way, after I looked over your story. Should we mark it as "underaged" by forum standards, or can we assume everyone involved has hit that magical age of 18? Some of the folks here at the group won't read stories with underaged characters.
[/quote]

The youngest character in my story is 18.

[Black-Boo]

Ah I'll get to it. I've got several stories, but do they HAVE to contain vore to be posted? I've got some nice ones, but they don't contain vore just yet, but they will in the future...

[4ofSwords]

Ah I'll get to it. I've got several stories, but do they HAVE to contain vore to be posted? I've got some nice ones, but they don't contain vore just yet, but they will in the future...

Well, we do encourage them to be vore-themed, at least. Vore scenes aren't required, but vore is the topic of the writing group.

[Black-Boo]

Ah. Well I might as well get motivated to proceed in my story "Minish Plaything" then. I've got a very short worm vore scene in the next chapter, but I'm going to type up the final vore scene just to get you all interested in it (and perhaps attract some views to the chapters on DA)

[voriator212]

who do i turn'em into?

i got two i wanted commented on, cuz they're getting lonely without critique

[4ofSwords]

who do i turn'em into?

i got two i wanted commented on, cuz they're getting lonely without critique

You just need to follow the instructions in the first post of the thread! Make sure you quote or copy-paste the submission template and you should be in good shape.

[Black-Boo]

Gonna get this out of the way. I'll edit my story into my post later, okay?

ABOUT YOU:
Your name: Black Boo
Your writing library URL(s): http://black-boo.deviantart.com/
Have you read the rules and guidelines, and do you agree to them? Aye to both questions
Have you proofread your own story? Yes. Yes I have.

YOUR POST:
Title/Summary: It's the final vore scene from my story Minish Plaything, a Zelda based fan-fic starring Link, Din, and Nayru (their oracle forms). In short, Din wanted to mess with Link so she shrunk him, but when she went out for a few minutes, Link fell into Nayru's caring hands. Too bad he lied to her on how he was transformed, and when Din came to reclaim Link, she lied as well. This could burn them in the future--and possibly Nayru's stomach!
NOTE: This whole story is a "Sequel" or branch off of Hero Sandwich by ChaosEmerald2. The original work can be found on his DA page.
Word Count: MUST I? Ugh. i don't remember how. Someone please do this...
Rating and Classification: There is soft oral vore and mild digestion. Not much else to be said.
Type of Critique Preferred: I would like some rather gentle yet constructive and to the point critiquing please. :3
Questions for the Readers: Would you be interested in reading the rest of the story, even though the first five chapters don't exactly have vore, and there's a small voreless segment in the middle?

YOUR READING LIST:
Rating and Classification Preferred: I dislike most sexual content, though I don't mind unbirth one bit. I normally tend to stick to F/M or F/F soft vore (I hate gory readings...ugh...). I can tolerate M/F, but I prefer to stay as far away from it as possible!
Critiquing Style: I'm a rather detailed critic, though I tend to stay with the big picture. I'm very constructive and helpful

Don't forget to attach your writing!

[4ofSwords]

Gonna get this out of the way. I'll edit my story into my post later, okay?

As long as you attach it by the 7th!

[Black-Boo]

Gonna get this out of the way. I'll edit my story into my post later, okay?

As long as you attach it by the 7th!

The seventh? Ha, I might have it done tonight!

[Black-Boo]

Okey dokey, uploaded.

Compared to Le Jauq, I need a lot more work on my description. @_@

[4ofSwords]

Okey dokey, uploaded.

Word count: 2218

[4ofSwords]

Tomorrow's the last day for posting in September! For those U.S. folks, that means Labor Day (so get to laborin'!)

[Sehnsucht]

Here's an idea that's been kicking around in my head for a while. I'm not sure how well-executed it is, but I wanted to post it now in case I don't get a chance to do a more clear-headed reread tomorrow.

ABOUT YOU:
Your name: London. Andrew London.
Your writing library URL(s): EPWG is my home.
Have you read the rules and guidelines, and do you agree to them? Yep.
Have you proofread your own story? Yep.

YOUR POST:
Title/Summary: Mouse: Impossible. A group of highly trained mice are perfectly suited to some kinds of industrial espionage. However, an ill-advised return visit gives them more trouble than they anticipated, and they are called on to use all their wits just to survive.
Word Count: 5463.
Rating and Classification: Heavily Macro/micro, FF/mf. Soft oral, bit of gore, bit of crushing. "Phone vore"
Type of Critique Preferred: Honest and courteous. Give examples where possible, and suggestions for improvements are welcome. Something about the flow seems off to me, so suggestions about doing things differently are very welcome.
Questions for the Readers: Is it ever unclear what's going on? Did I set up any hooks in your mind that failed to be satisfied? The 2 ending paras suck: can you think of an improvement? It was inspired by Mission: Impossible. I think I accidentally took on board the bad characterisation, though. Did any/all of the characters seem kind of vague to you? Is the story worse for it? Was the vore too short? Can you think of a better title?

YOUR READING LIST:
Rating and Classification Preferred: Fairly permissive. Prefer sentient female preds, furry or human. Love power exchange, macro and catgirls. Prefer oral, but can handle anything you throw at me. Really tripped up by bad grammar.
Critiquing Style: Courteous but clear critic. Can look at the big picture of plot and character more easily when the little picture of grammar and imagery is already sorted. Apparently my approach is to crawl through the story with a fine tooth-comb, but ask specific questions and I'll do my best to address them.

Don't forget to attach your writing!
Done. This will hopefully change, too.

[4ofSwords]

Splendid, Mr. London!

Any last minuters? Round closes in hours. Hours, I say! (How many, I can't say. Whenever I wake up tomorrow.)

[Tobedumped]

Splendid, Mr. London!

Any last minuters? Round closes in hours. Hours, I say! (How many, I can't say. Whenever I wake up tomorrow.)

Right now I have a kind of half-formed work staring me in the face. Would we rather I share a half-work and get some thoughts on how to complete it or should I hold off until I actually have something?